If you’ve never edited a book but you want to make sure your manuscript is in tip-top shape before you submit it to a publisher, this post is for you.

When your book is signed to a publisher, one of the most delightful aspects is getting an editorial report when you’ve submitted your book draft.

Editors know story. I’ve been lucky enough to work with three incredible editors, and each time, it felt like Christmas when I received my feedback report.

Part of the reason I loved those structural notes was because I learned so much about storytelling and story structure in the process. What was interesting for me to write, may not have actually helped advanced the story. Similarly, I’d too-quickly summarise a moment or meeting of huge significance to the key point of the story.

The key with assessing your manuscript like a professional would, is to question every page and its relevance to the point of your story. This is where your memoir focus sentence really comes in handy.

An editorial feedback report is anywhere from 10-30 pages of written feedback on structure, story, sentence syntax, plot, character development and pacing. This doesn’t cover typos and grammar. That comes at the copyediting stage.

Read on for my guide to editing your manuscript (structurally) like a pro.

It will improve your chances of landing a book deal and it will make you a better writer, too.

Lay it out on the floor

When I was drafting A Letter From Paris and Love + Other U-Turns, I printed out the manuscript in hard copy. (The above picture is of the second-last draft of A Letter From Paris, with beautiful Sabrina making a guest appearance.)

My agent gave me the extra tip of laying out the print version in landscape, two pages to a page, because that’s how it looks in a printed book. This is really helpful because you can see how many pages are in each chapter, when you’re doing excessively-long paragraphs or including no dialogue for pages at a time, and as a whole, where you’ve placed key events in the narrative. If they’re all up the front of the book – why would anyone keep reading?

Aside from being incredibly helpful from an editing perspective, it also meant that when my final draft was submitted – I had over 600 A4 pages lying in a stack next to my desk. As a Virgo moon who likes to recycle (!), I couldn’t help but chop up the pages for daily to-do lists.

Only problem is, sometimes I find myself examining the sentence structure of certain early drafts of random pages and gasping at how bad it was.

Bottom line: re-writing and editing will make your manuscript sing. Don’t you dare send that draft to anyone before you’ve given it another go!

Using your printed manuscript to write your feedback notes:

  • Give yourself an undisturbed 3-5 hours to go through the manuscript (it takes a LOT of focus). Preferably a whole day. 
  • Start a document on your computer and keep a stack of post-its handy for bullet point notes you can stick on the actual pages.
  • Then, when you work sequentially through the manuscript in your re-draft, you’ve got all your guidance ready to go.
1: Cut out the back story

Remember that your manuscript is a story, first and foremost. If you were telling an important story to a friend, would you explain everything that happened in your life before a bear came to eat you? No. Maybe you’d include why you happened to be in a particular location where a bear was (ie. relevant info) but it would all tie into how and why a bear came to eat you.

Similarly, when you’re looking at your manuscript, examine everything to assess whether the event or explanation in every one of your laid-out chapters relates to the key action or point of the story. If not, it will need to go.

“Because it happened in that order” is the worst reason to include something in your memoir manuscript.

If it makes more sense to put the most crucial scene up the front (even if it happened at the end of the story), then do so.

You can turn it into a flashback, or play with the narrative.

TIP: when your manuscript is laid out on the floor, how many pages does it take for you to get to the ‘point’ of your story, or the reason you are telling this story? Can you move some of the back-story scenes (only if they’re necessary for the reader to fully understand the story) to later on in the book? This will help with pacing.

Remember that the first ten pages are crucial in hooking the reader.

2: Cut out excessive details and irrelevant chapters (and expand on crucial ones)

“The first draft is just you telling yourself the story.”

Terry Pratchett

Here’s a truth: you can make anything boring.
How? By including too many irrelevant details.

When I look at early drafts of A Letter From Paris or Love + Other U-Turns – or most of the manuscripts I’ve worked on for others, there is so much detail that the really interesting information is drowned out in tedium.

For example, in one of the early drafts of A Letter From Paris, I described in (excruciating detail) what I wore and what I ate for dinner the day I received Coralie’s email from Paris. How was that relevant to the story? It wasn’t. So I cut it. STILL – getting that first draft info down is crucial because, as Terry Pratchett so wisely said, you need to tell yourself the story before you can start to edit it.

By including excessive detail, you make the reader work harder to understand where you’re taking them on the journey, and why they should keep reading.

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Anything that doesn’t advance the action of the story needs to be eliminated.

This ties into what I said above – just because something happened, doesn’t mean you have to include it in your memoir. Memoir is a story. It’s not your diary.

For example, if your story is about a battle with depression, why do you have three chapters devoted to an epic and delightful trip you went on to Zimbabwe? Unless that trip contributed to your depression or led to an epiphany (or recovery) from said depression, it needs to go.

The opposite goes for elements of the story you’ve skipped or skimmed, which are actually crucial to the plot. This can be a bit trickier to assess, when it’s your own story. But if you keep referring back to your focus sentence, you can make some good judgement calls.

For example: If we’re to stay with the depression memoir, and you’ve only written a sentence to a paragraph about your first experience of meeting a psychiatrist to deal with the issue (a crucial ‘turning point’ in the story’), that will need to be ‘padded out’ and turned into a scene or a chapter.

TIP: When you’ve laid your manuscript out on the floor, examine each chapter for dialogue, back story, scene-setting, and even sentence length. In general, longer chapters (and longer sentences) slow down the pacing. Shorter chapters (and shorter sentences) speed it up. Dialogue moves the pace along faster, too. Try to include a good mix. Your editorial notes might look something like:
Chapter 4 – add more re: first visit to Doctor. Add dialogue (check emails from June?) Cut trip to park.

3: Show, don’t tell

Book-length work is all about scene-setting. You have the luxury of a longer time to set the scene, so this is when your creativity can really come into play, even though you’re telling a true story.

Examine your manuscript for excessively simple ‘telling’, not showing, and note where you could expand and really pull the reader in further through setting the scene with metaphor. For example – do you repeat a sentence such as “I was exhausted” a lot? How could you show this, instead? Did you drive home one night only to realise you couldn’t remember the trip home?

A great example of showing, not telling, is in Cheryl Strayed’s WILD. She could easily have said she felt sore from hiking, but instead used the example of taking a bath and seeing herself for the first time in a mirror, to ‘show’ her physical condition.

I did not so much look like a woman who had spent the past three weeks backpacking in the wilderness as i did like a woman who had been the victim of a violent and bizarre crime. Bruises that ranged in colour from yellow to black lined my arms and legs, my back and rump, as if I’d been beaten with sticks…

TIP: Use your laid out draft and look at each chapter, writing a one sentence summary of how the actions of that chapter advance the story to the end-point or conclusion of your memoir. Where do you need to set the scene better? Ideally each chapter starts with some scene-setting. Can you look at a diary, some photos, an email, to get more details around a particular bit to fill out the scene?

In summary
  • Use your memoir focus sentence to assess each chapter for relevancy to the story as a whole. If the action of each chapter advances that key point, keep it. If not, cut it. If certain aspects need expanding, note that, too.
  • Cover each chapter in post-its with bullet point notes if you need to.
  • Transcribe your post-it notes into a word document you can work through sequentially (this is your own editorial report!). Part of the reason re-drafting can be so overwhelming is because we don’t know where to begin. By creating your own editing notes, you’re making your own guidebook, really.
  • If you’re hoping to pitch your manuscript to a publisher or agent, the first twenty pages need to plunge the reader into the story.
    Download your free memoir revision checklist.

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